2/2/12: Much better job. Thank you. Final grade is 84. Mr. Baskin
Student: Ronan Whelan
You earned 71 out of 100 points. I very much would like for you to borrow another copy of the novel and revise/add to/fix/rewrite the parts of the essay that I write notes about below. Go for 100. I know you can do it. Make corrections and resubmit this to me by next Friday, January 27.
Mr. Baskin
1/19/12
Grading Points Rubric for Essential-Question Essay on The River
Introduction Paragraph: Thesis/topic sentence; at least three traits stated; explanation of how the essay will proceed.
Maximum Number of Points: 10 POINTS EARNED: 10 points earned.
Traits Paragraph: List the traits; define each trait; provide a brief example from the novel for the trait.
Maximum Number of Points: 15 POINTS EARNED: Good job.; 15 points
Conflict Paragraph: Description of the conflict at the beginning of the novel; description of how the conflict changes; explanation of what is similar to and different between the two conflicts.
Maximum Number of Points: 15 POINTS EARNED:
7 out of 15 points. You need to first say what the conflict is a the beginning when Derek visits Brian with a request, when they arrive in the wilderness what is the conflict; and finally, after the lightning strike, what is the conflict? Then, explain what in the conflict changes and what stays the same.You neet to add about 6 more sentences, please.
Fill-in-the-Blanks Paragraphs on the Thinking Process/Problem Solving:
Sixty-seven blanks to use the following thinking-process terms: observe or observation; wonder or reflect or reflection; name or naming or identify or identification; consider alternatives or options or considering; predict or predicting or prediction; choose a solution or make a choice or solve or choose; make a plan or prepare a plan or plan; gather resources;
act or do or perform a solution. Maximum Number of Points: 25 POINTS EARNED Full credit. 25 poins.
Summary of Paragraphs 97-132 in terms of the Thinking Process
From twenty to forty sentences summarizing what Brian is doing on these pages using the vocabulary of the thinking process. Maximum Number of Points: 20 POINTS EARNED: 7 out of 20 points. You did minimal work here. You need to write a summary sentence for each page from 96-132. You need to use the thinking process vocabulary. You need to write about 30 more sentences, Ronan. Plus 5 points. 1/29/12
Conclusion
Restatement of the message or lesson of the novel; explanation of why this is an important message or lesson to know; description of how the writer of the essay (the student) can specifically use this lesson in his/her life in the future. Maximum Number of Points: 15
7 out of 15 point. Ronan, I'm sorry, but you really did not follow the directions for the Conclusion. First, reread your essay AFTER YOU REVISE EVERYTHING ABOVE. Then, in your conclusion, restate what lesson Brian Robeson learned or taught; why this is an important message or lesson; and finally, explain how in your future life you can use or apply this lesson. You need to write about 8 more sentences.
2/2/12:
Much better job. Thank you. Final grade is 84.
Mr. Baskin
Student: Ronan Whelan
You earned 71 out of 100 points. I very much would like for you to borrow another copy of the novel and revise/add to/fix/rewrite the parts of the essay that I write notes about below. Go for 100. I know you can do it. Make corrections and resubmit this to me by next Friday, January 27.
Mr. Baskin
1/19/12
Grading Points Rubric for Essential-Question Essay on The River- Introduction Paragraph: Thesis/topic sentence; at least three traits stated; explanation of how the essay will proceed.
Maximum Number of Points: 10 POINTS EARNED:10 points earned.
- Traits Paragraph: List the traits; define each trait; provide a brief example from the novel for the trait.
Maximum Number of Points: 15 POINTS EARNED:Good job.; 15 points
- Conflict Paragraph: Description of the conflict at the beginning of the novel; description of how the conflict changes; explanation of what is similar to and different between the two conflicts.
Maximum Number of Points: 15 POINTS EARNED:7 out of 15 points. You need to first say what the conflict is a the beginning when Derek visits Brian with a request, when they arrive in the wilderness what is the conflict; and finally, after the lightning strike, what is the conflict? Then, explain what in the conflict changes and what stays the same. You neet to add about 6 more sentences, please.
- Fill-in-the-Blanks Paragraphs on the Thinking Process/Problem Solving:
Sixty-seven blanks to use the following thinking-process terms: observe or observation; wonder or reflect or reflection; name or naming or identify or identification; consider alternatives or options or considering; predict or predicting or prediction; choose a solution or make a choice or solve or choose; make a plan or prepare a plan or plan; gather resources;act or do or perform a solution.
Maximum Number of Points: 25 POINTS EARNED
Full credit. 25 poins.
- Summary of Paragraphs 97-132 in terms of the Thinking Process
From twenty to forty sentences summarizing what Brian is doing on these pages using the vocabulary of the thinking process.Maximum Number of Points: 20 POINTS EARNED:
7 out of 20 points. You did minimal work here. You need to write a summary sentence for each page from 96-132. You need to use the thinking process vocabulary. You need to write about 30 more sentences, Ronan.
Plus 5 points. 1/29/12
- Conclusion
Restatement of the message or lesson of the novel; explanation of why this is an important message or lesson to know; description of how the writer of the essay (the student) can specifically use this lesson in his/her life in the future.Maximum Number of Points: 15
7 out of 15 point. Ronan, I'm sorry, but you really did not follow the directions for the Conclusion. First, reread your essay AFTER YOU REVISE EVERYTHING ABOVE. Then, in your conclusion, restate what lesson Brian Robeson learned or taught; why this is an important message or lesson; and finally, explain how in your future life you can use or apply this lesson. You need to write about 8 more sentences.
+ 8 points on 2/2/12